My favourite place in Waikanae is the beach. Because…
.I can feel the dusty sand between my toes. I can see the hard crashing waves. I can taste the salty sea and sand. I can hear dogs cheerfully barking and the CRASH, splashing of the waves. I can smell the salty ocean.
I love your description of the waves - sometimes they are hard!
ReplyDeleteLove the story but don't get what the sorry part is for
ReplyDeleteother then that it is a really good description of the beach.
What sorry part?
DeleteWhat sorry part?
DeleteLove the story but don't get what the sorry part is for
ReplyDeleteother then that it is a really good description of the beach.
same but this isn't related to any school work stuff...
ReplyDeleteYes it is the whole class did it
DeleteYes it is the whole class did it
Deletesame but this isn't related to any school work stuff...
ReplyDeleteThanks!
ReplyDeleteWhat sorry part?
It is school stuff.
What I liked about your story was how you described why the Waikanae beach was your favorite place, and how you used descriptive words like dusty sand, hard crashing waves and that you can smell the salty ocean. I found it a little hard to read because it’s all in capitals, but I really think you put some effort into this piece of work.
ReplyDeleteQuestions:
Why did you decide to write about this?
When you went there who did you go with?
Is it a fun place?
Would you want to go there again?
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I really think you put some effort in this writing and I like the way you wrote this story. I like you description of the waves. I found a little hard to read it because it was all in capital letters but I really think you put some effort.
Question:
Why did you decide to write this story?
Do you know how to get to Ireland?
Have you ever visited your Grandpa?
I love your story.. I found it a little bit hard to read because it was all in capitals, but I’m glad that I read it. Remember you need full stops every time in your sentences. Apart from all of that it is awesome.
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ReplyDeleteHey Shannon I like the way you put lots of information in this cool piece of writing. I really think you put some effort into this writing also I really like your story because it tells me where you went, what you could feel and what you could see. Shannon if you don’t mind you could go back into your blog and check your lowercase letters because I couldn’t really read your writing properly.
Questions:
Do you think you could have put more detail? Do you really like this piece of writing?
Do you think you should check your work before you publish it?